While the plot is this story’s strongest feature, the style and voice combined with weak writing brings it down. The author’s voice is lost in all the awkward sentences and grammatical errors. There are several places where the POV changes without smooth transitions. There are several areas where the pace is slow. (I made suggestions in the text of the entry.) But there are glimpses into this author’s writing style to lead me to believe that talent is there; they just need to dig deeper and keep a critical eye on the writing mechanics.
My PLOT is strong and my CHARACTERS weak? Wow. Slow-paced, I'll grant. And that's severely cut down, too...
And grammatical errors? Me? (Unless they're in dialog, I suppose. I need to go through the whole thing and see the individual commentary on the actual writing - the above is from one of the scorecards.)
Nice to know she thinks I have talent. *sniff*
What's REALLY weird is this judge also tells me that John Dillon is the most interesting and LIKABLE character in my piece. Those of you who have read it, what do you think about that one?
Anyway, once the pain settles, then I can read the commentary and use it/lose it as I see fit before the next rejection comes in and I move to the next submission.
Please let my dragons live! (Thanks to all the clicky folks!)